Yeah!

Yeah!

Also, that bow is the same color as the roof in my file, I just forgot to change it on this thing.

While I like the idea, I have three comments.



1. The perspective is not right. I'm not sure whether or not you intended this, but it bugs me. Either the shadow must be parallel to the bottom of the shirt, or everything else must not be.



2. I think it may be more effective if the tower *looked* more intimidating. A change of architecture might accomplish this, or possible making the tower concave instead of convex. Forced perspective is always fun, but difficult to achieve.



3. It may need some reorganization - there's something odd about the big, blank middle as it is.

Switched the knight/tower position, darker + texture on tower, etc.

i agree with brightwood here. looks very nice. i like the detail on the shingles.



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that's all hand drawn right? I really like the style. I think you should just keep building on it. But the style is pretty awesome and is actually a really big improvement on your earlier stuff.

you need to place the knight walking towards the tower, like this it looks like he is passing by

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a lot better. this is minor, but I think the knight should be a little further under the shadow. only because where he is now, I would expect most of his upper half to be out of shadow.

Juandiego, I noticed that after I drew the knight, but was too lazy to change it. I will for sure, haha.



Also, what do you guys think about turning the shadow not into a girl, but a witch? Because you know the witch in the story of Rapunzel, etc. Thoughts?

Also I thought of maybe adding a dragon flying behind the tower to make it more intimidating?

i sorta wish the tower was more elaborate and looked even bigger. The one thing this shirt lacks is something that makes lookers say wow. like what if he was crossing a bridge at the bottom or something,. and the castle took up the whole rest of the shirt? Just an idea

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Maybe I could add him crossing a bridge, with a moat around the tower, and crocodiles in the moat, with a dragon hovering overhead?

yeah--if you could add some more deterrents it would improve the design a lot. what if you drew the night from behind looking up at the tower with the flower held down at his side? that would suggest that he feels overwhelmed by the obstacles. sorry if that's too specific, just an idea.

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^That's actually what I'm trying to do now, but it's a bit difficult.

First of all, I like it much, much better. That said:



1. Still I think the tower ought to be more intimidating to look at



2. While the perspective is a lot better, I think that the knight should be facing toward the castle as opposed to sideways, and looking up at it. As it is, he appears to be walking past it.

Like others mentioned, you should change that knight so that he's facing the castle, and give him a subtle shadow. With his current position and lack of shadow, it looks like a random illustration pasted on.



Also, ways to make the castle a little more intimidating (which I fully agree with), maybe add a moat? You could have some fun with a weird little moat around the place. It could be a simple blue, watery moat ... or maybe a shark fin or two? I mean, yes, that's probably pushing it ... but it's nice to get some random thoughts thrown around.



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Either way, this is really awesome. I couldn't imagine this being printed on anything but that shade of green. The colors are really great. The castle's shadow is flawless.

I'm trying to figure out how to add a few things without adding any more colors. I suppose the blue of the knight is blue enough to pass as water, but that brings a problem to the shadow, because the shadow cast over a stream would have to be a darker shade of blue. I can put the dragon on as green with some red and yellow highlights without adding any colors, but the moat and bridge are presenting me with some interesting problems! I'll figure it out, haha.

Also, the new knight is much better. I promise.

Yeah ... argh, I didn't think about the water shadow issue. I'd say the blue of the knight is definitely good enough for the water ... maybe it's possible to get away with the shadow on the water being the same tone if you break the shadow up with lines to simulate ripples? In a ))))) fashion, except with the curves aimed downward. Breaking up the tone with ripples might somehow give it a darker effect on the water.

Yeah! That could work. I do have one color left (there's only 7 so far) but I'm trying to decide where it would be used best. I could darken the darkest tan and make that the bridge color, then use the last color to darken the water...

Hmm?

Aww, they didn't post the info. ANYWAYS this is just a rough "How if might look" thing. The dragon for sure needs more detail, and I'm adding a moat too, but the knight looks much better!

Have you put this on a different color background? Would be cool to see what a blue background (or whatever) behind this art would look like. Also, The moat would probably be cool, too. But the first thing I thought when I saw this one was that the tower and dragon alone, or even just the tower by itself (no knight at all) would be something. The tower tells a great story, and has a great style, even without a knight or dragon in the picture. Anyway, good luck.

I like the overall composition, the knight, but I guess the dragon needs a bit more work. The tower ia amazing: beautiful style.



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It'd be really nice if the dragon was wrapped around the bottom of the castle, and was asleep. Then, when you add the moat, perhaps his tail or claw could be casually hanging in the water?



With the style of this shirt, it'd worked much better if the dragon was a slumbering beast, and we know that to get past him to climb the hair, the Knight's going to wake that sucker up.



The Knight's a lot better now though, that's for sure.

I like the knight a lot in this one...

I like the idea of a sleeping dragon too, possibly with claw/tail overhanging the moat or something. It would fit the style well.



I like the position of the sword and bouquet now... though you might try them even lower.

Ah! Sleeping dragon! That would be cool! Also, to everyone, I know the dragon needs work, this was just for me to see what it would look like. I'm going to try some things now.

This is verrrry rough. I think the moat looks absolutely terrible, but I think I like the sleeping dragon. I also shrunk the knight.

Gosh, that moat looks so bad haha.

The size of the Knight's good. I'd lose the crocodiles maybe. It takes away from the dragon. And yeah, glad you realize the moat's a bit ... off. Ha, but that's the general idea I was suggesting! And look, the shadow in the water doesn't look bad at all. The dragon's a bit off, the way he's laying, with his feet in that place, doesn't quite match up. Also, some red spikes on his backside on the left side of the castle couldn't hurt.



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Perspective.

Yours is all over the place.

If you want the tower and dragon to be intimidating, you need to have the knight at "eye-level" for the viewer and have the dragon and tower soar into the sky above him. The dragon should be rearing up - looking down at the knight too.



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Haha, the moat was literally me drawing, scanning, vectoring, and coloring in a few minutes. I also agree with the dragon's feet being a little off. At first I had one in the moat, but I had to change the moat so the foot got a little thrown off. I'm going to compleeeeeetely redo the moat, because it looks absolutely awful, and doesn't fit the style at all. I laugh every time I see it. I'll also redo the dragon's feet, add a few spikes, etc.

fyi: not the same idea exactly, but i just came across this design while scoring:



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Blah. I didn't rip it I promise. I started this after I was random stock photo generating and saw a neat picture of a tower.

As hard as I've been working on this, I'm going to stop for a while to work on a completely different project. I will certainly resume after I'm done, but this new one requires my full attention!

erg... that moat!



Outside of that, the dragon doesn't look scary enough, if "scary" is what you're going for... 'till now it has almost seemed like the obstacles are passive.



You could try him perched "like a bat" on the roof, with wings extended over an arched neck. I'm not sure how easy it would be to do volumetric shading, or if it would be possible to put it on a shirt (probably not). If you could, it would be a cool effect to have its wings partially obscuring the sun with volumetric effects.



You should probably disregard that last rambling about volumetric light... I've spent too much time in the Blender and not enough in GIMP ;)